100 Word Challenge

Me and my friend Payton went for a walk on the beach. We saw this mysterious house Payton ran 20 minutes later she ran out with a creature running after her. She ran to a popular place on the beach so the creature could not see her than the creature turned everyone to stone. I was lucky to escape. Payton was lucky too she escaped. However, many other people we stone because of Payton that is nothing to be proud of.

So me and Payton walk around so many people that were turned to stone. It took an hour to leave.

 

One thought on “100 Word Challenge”

  1. Hello Ella,

    Thank you for your story. I particularly liked how Payton managed to escape, even if it ended up being her fault that everyone else got turned into stone.

    I did wonder why it took an hour to leave though?

    My only minor point would be to put Payton’s name first, rather than saying, ‘Me and Payton’, in the first and last sentences.

    Thank you for sharing!

    Michelle, Team 100WC
    Melbourne, Australia

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